writing

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

Adjectives	Nouns	Verbs	Adverbs
dark	warehouse	running	fast
dusty	bikes	walking	slow
cold	Torches
scary	bike

                                   

One day my friends and i went on a bike ride then we found an old

warehouse. we kicked the door down then we went in side it was very

cold and dusty then went into a scary dark room then we turned on our

torches then we looked down then we saw a dead man then we ran fast

\out of the building then we jumped on our bikes  biked home then we

never went back to the old warehouse again.

Self assessment...  Done well… One day my friends and i went on a

bike ride then we found an old warehouse.

Work on… we jumped on our bikes  biked home then we never went

back to the old warehouse again.

I like how you didnt start the story in the building but you used then

too much next time you shouldn't use too many of the same word

and I also liked how you said you ran out and never came back

to the old warehouse again.

descriptive writing

For writing this week we have been working on descriptive writing. Mrs Clark gave

us this picture and we had to brainstorm Nouns, Verbs, Adverbs and Adjectives that

we thought could help describe the picture. we used these words to create a

paragraph.

After we had written we then self assessed to see which of the the descriptive words we used. I really liked this activity because its Friday! Next time I would like to include more writing. WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

Adjectives	Nouns	Verbs	Adverbs
Broken	Beach	Crashing	cloudly
Abandoned	clouds		stormy
	waves

My paragraph

One stormy night there were 3 men on a ship the waves were crashing  the ship into the rocks then the ship got washed up onto the beach the ship was broken then the men abandoned the ship.

footage

This week  I have been doing Bigfoot footage  and I found some videos and photos of the internet.

lerning place vaule

we are learning to write lerning place vaule word problims.

Gage poem

Place Value to 1000

Nikau Palm

Nikau Palm

this week we have been learning about Nikau Palm tree

       

WALT:   - write a descriptive paragraph - use a variety of descriptive words to make my writing interesting

Topic: Nikau Palm Audience: GMS, worldwide blog audience Purpose: To clearly describe the features of a nikau palm so people can recognise and identify it in the school environment

Text type: Description Task: You are going to describe to your audience what a nikau palm looks like and its identifying features.  Remember to use a variety of descriptive words and phrases so you create a picture in your reader’s mind.   Model

Key Vocabulary: Use your describe bubble as the basis for your description. Click on this link to see some more words you could include.

Structure: Topic Sentence: Introduces the topic by giving a basic sentence describing what the paragraph is going to be about. Supporting sentences: Provides the detail of the tree from top to bottom to create the picture in the reader’s mind (sensory detail, adjectives). Tell about it’s features, where it grows and what it does. Concluding sentence: Sums up the important detail and gives an overall impression of the topic.

Check and Share 1. Check your writing with a buddy or yourself using the Paragraph checker. RUBRIC.   2. Highlight the descriptive vocabulary you have used in your paragraph. 3. Copy and paste your description into a google drawing, add images then post on your blog.

Use this to plan your ideas

Topic Sentence The nikau palm is a tall and spiky tree found on the coast road New Zealand.

Support #1: The trunk is long and  it is brown and Bumpy.

Support #2 Nikau palm trees can grow to 10 to 15 meters.

Support #3: Nikau palm go along the coast Road in New Zealand near Greymouth.

Concluding sentence: the Nikau palm tree would be really easy if you was driving the west coast new zealand